ext_136492 ([identity profile] dougras.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] effervescible 2008-05-20 03:01 pm (UTC)

Actually it gets better when, later in the story, Gabriel confesses that he sings best in Latin.

The language that only God understands.

And this line:

“Well, of course, I know Micah, doesn’t everyone? I just saw him and Jeremiah and a couple of the minor prophets the other day."

This seems a little rude to me. They're called minor prophets because their books are really short, but if you actually know the guys would you call them that?

Also, I love this exchange:

“Wow, Gabe, look. It’s Redeemer 1. Better get into your choir robe.” Quickly Gabriel slipped into his choir robe.

It paints such a vivid picture! And I've always found it's best to tell the readers what a character will do, then say the character does that, using a sentence structure that manages to grate on the ear with mindless repetition.

I cannot get enough of this magazine. We should all take up subscriptions.

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